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Where House is NEVER safe...
Evening Hour (nineteenth in the HOUR series) 
16th-Jul-2007 10:30 am
Title: Evening Hour
Characters: House, Wilson
Rating: PG
Genre: Angst
Word Count: 1100 
Summary: Wilson thinks he's doing fine; House knows better. 

The previous vignettes, in order, are:
Visiting Hour,  Happy Hour,  Midnight Hour Fifty-Minute Hour Random Hour,  Painful Hour,  Dark Hour ,  Desperate Hour,  Witching Hour ,  Lonely HourDinner Hour Legal Hour  Honorable Hour,  House's Hour ,  Wilson's Hour ,  Uncomfortable Hour ,  Lunch Hour , and Administrative Hour .

Evening HourCollapse )

17th-Jul-2007 01:52 am (UTC)
Beautiful. Gut-wrenching. Wow.
17th-Jul-2007 12:05 pm (UTC)

thank you; i really was attempting to portray wilson's jumble of emotions so clearly that the readers would feel them as well. nice to know that you felt it!
17th-Jul-2007 04:53 am (UTC)
First of all, kidsnurse, let me say how sorry I am that I am so late commenting on this. I was a little busy today but that's no excuse.

So. I really liked this. A lot. I loved the slow buildup to Wilson's breakdown -- because that's what it really was, a breakdown. But he was able to break down because he was safe -- with House. I loved the slow buildup, I loved the opening of the stab wound corresponding with the opening of Wilson's feelings, and I especially loved Wilson's breathing.

That whole bit, about how Wilson had forgotten what it was like to take a deep breath, was just wonderful. It's such a small thing, but it means so much. It is details like this that can make or break a story, and you carried it off wonderfully.

I will be so sorry to see this story end, because I wish it could go on and on. You have done a masterful job.

*grins widely* See? I told you you could do it. *hugs*
17th-Jul-2007 09:13 am (UTC)
Echoing NDB, because frankly they write better than I do. I will be sad to see this series end. And now that I am not hungry when reading this can I say that this story was like a hurricane, you have the buildup- some stormness, then it seems like the eyewall is coming over and now we have the other side of the eyewall. Maybe now the storm will pass. So, in true Kid'sNurse tradition, will there be a sequel?
17th-Jul-2007 12:13 pm (UTC)
true Kid'sNurse tradition, will there be a sequel?

arrgh! there's that... scary word again!!!

*cowers in corner* ;)

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17th-Jul-2007 12:11 pm (UTC)
I was a little busy today

quite all right; i had a wee black raincloud over my head all day, thus was... unfit to interact with human beings anyway. today, it's sunny! :)

That whole bit, about how Wilson had forgotten what it was like to take a deep breath

was my own favorite part of this segment; thanks for mentioning it.

I loved the opening of the stab wound corresponding with the opening of Wilson's feelings

happy accident, i guess--as i didn't 'catch' that until you mentioned it. rather like the key thing... sometimes my density astounds even me... sigh.

I told you you could do it.

and votes of confidence from skilled writers like you can make all the difference. thanks! :)

17th-Jul-2007 01:43 pm (UTC)
Wow, nice. He didn't know what he needed and House did for once. Beautiful. I love keeping Wilson's perspective at the end so that the focus is on the great unburdening he's undergone. He needed that. I needed that. Excellent. Cheers.
17th-Jul-2007 02:05 pm (UTC)
He needed that. I needed that.

and so did i. and--immediately after typing all that out at full speed, what i needed was a nap! it was... draining... to write--in a satisfying, almost cathartic way.
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17th-Jul-2007 04:03 pm (UTC)
the mention of the concerned House being "more work", but he's touched in a way as well as annoyed

i think he's definitely touched! how could he not be? concerned!house is just so endearing!! :)
27th-Jul-2007 02:53 pm (UTC)

Trust House to know the value of anger. And the gruff caring that causes him to poke until the wound drains.

Btw, am I just suffering from lack of sleep or did you really, permanently change tenses a few chapters back???

*puts Muse to work on titles* b/c if there's only one more part, I'm not entirely sure it would be finished yet.... (fortunately, you don't seem to mind others playing in your versions of the sandbox)

Reading on and Musing,
29th-Jul-2007 03:11 pm (UTC)
*puts Muse to work on titles* b/c if there's only one more part, I'm not entirely sure it would be finished yet.... (fortunately, you don't seem to mind others playing in your versions of the sandbox)

ack! i'm reading, and responding to, your comments out of order, apparently! i interpreted your comment at the conclusion of Bittersweet Hour to mean that you were suggesting i continue the story. sorry for the misinterpretation!

as to others playing in the Hour 'verse, i'm assuming you noticed the lovely contributions from blackmare and nightdog_barks. what you may not realize is that those are two of my own favorite writers, with whom I have a significant level of experience and trust. both of them asked permission and then sent their work to me for approval and review -- never with the assumption that what they had written would be used in any way.

i know them well enough to know that I could very easily have said 'thanks, but no thanks' without hurting their feelings. and they are both aware of something you couldn't know; i've previously had what i'll term 'a negative experience' allowing another writer, a while back, into another of my 'verses. so i'm... skittish, i s'pose. instinct tells me you're an excellent writer, just from reading your comments. so it's nothing personal--at all. it's just... me, being weird. i very much hope you understand where i'm coming from!
30th-Jul-2007 05:46 am (UTC)

No, no... you were right the first time. My intention was to think of Hour titles and possible subjects and pass them your way to do or not as you pleased. I admit, I hoped that if you were not interested in writing them yourself, you might say 'go for it', but wasn't saying w/the first intention being to do them myself. Like House, I enjoy solving puzzles... mine just happen to be literary, not medical.

My apologies for any misunderstanding. I forget sometimes that while I'm not a newbie author, I AM a newbie in this universe and community. Like w/actors, b/c the best authors pour so much of themselves into their work, it is easy to forget that, in reality, there is not nearly as much acquaintance as there might first appear to be. Again, please forgive any inadvertant offense.

Wierd??? Brightest Blessings, no! I understand... you too are in service of Story. This is a good thing, one I am very much in favor of, and while I admit to embarrassment at having been misunderstood in my enthusiasm, I am not offended in the least. Thank'ee's most kindly for your tact and kindness in the matter and the reassurance of it not being a personal thing.

May your Muse be ever at your side,

3rd-Jun-2009 09:17 pm (UTC)
There's nothing I can really add that everyone else hasn't covered already. It's a wonderful series of stories, and I love how you tied it all together at the end. I can vividly 'see' Wilson exploding all over the place while House stands there perfectly calm waiting for him to subside...

And I now have this firmly fixed mental image of Wilson staring in disbelief at the Pop Tart sandwich. :)
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